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Captions, how do I hate thee? (Plural of thee is … I dunno.). Captions for anything audible ruin the experience. No level of greatness in the visual product can overcome their taint.

Your admirer,

Caption Obvious

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Enjoyable and informative. Seems being a writer involves more than writing and less than performing, yet equal commitment.

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Yes! Toss in a little self-loathing and grandiosity and you're there. ;)

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The lady appearing out of the clouds so effectively wielding her head-severing axe is like a dream come true. Only thing I'd change is the red cloak: She should have it.

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I think you're probably right. If I decide to work on it further, I'll give it to her.

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fantastic advice, especially the part about experience. some things just can't be found in books. and that bit of dialogue is priceless :-) also, your story is too good not to continue...

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Thanks, J.M. It's not a genre I normally write in, but may pursue it a bit for fun.

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You're always so inspirational.

Yes, it was a long post, but I really enjoyed reading your thoughts on writing.

I loved the workers chatting. I do that. Not intentionally, but people like to talk, and I like to listen. So when I'm out and about, I just listen to the chatter around me. I also like to watch the WAY people say stuff. How most people can't go two seconds without touching their face or making audible sounds that have no exact spellings. I wish there were more ways to write "scoffed" without sounding mean.

My two bits: When I watch great shows like "Better Call Saul" (man, that team can write), I always leave on the closed captioning. I love reading all the ways the screen writers describe sounds. From insects chirruping to characters scoffing, I find that reading dialog on a TV show reveals how most people talk in short bursts and many other surrounding sounds that we might forget to include in our writing like an engine starts, a dog barks in the distance... :)

Also, while a bit macabre, the short story you wrote was very interesting. What a great exercise!

Keep sharing, and I'll keep reading!

Carmen

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Thanks, Carmen. I somehow knew you'd read and find something to appreciate in this one. I like the idea of turning on the captions when watching TV. And yes, "Better Call Saul" is great writing.

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